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You lie

You deceive

You enslaved me

To obey

To take the blame

To be the evil one

To do as you wish

But I saw the evil

And I tried to get away

But I was a possession of yours

You are a soulless creature

You use me to get what you want

But I am weak

For I cannot help but to obey you

Your words echo in my mind

And take over my heart

And lock away my soul

So that you would be my only judgment

And I your zombie puppet

And you my substance of life



I will be silent and obedient

As your slave

Once again

Just to expose the evil

Within you



Only to be possessed once again



With in my blood let it be true

I will be free of you



I will take the knife

And I will have my life

Under my control



 

Just something that been bothering me lately.

I really want your comments on it
let me know how it made you feel and what did you think of when you read it.


well I hope you enjoyed it. :blackrose:
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PeggytheDragon Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
This is a very strong piece of writing and I love it. I relate to it completely. Everyday I am just counting down waiting until I can leave and finally take control of my life instead of everyone controlling it and me and my future. Great piece I love it! :)
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LivingDreamer97 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You feel controlled by things and just want to be free and do what you want.  YOu want to not feel like you are being molded by something not yourself, and in that way you're angry.  I belive a lot of people feel this way.  Very nice. 
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LauraS45 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Hmm sadly I do think so to. Thank you:)
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LivingDreamer97 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome! :D (Big Grin) 
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012   General Artist
fun read. dark passion & surrender. moody . . . pissed. :highfive:
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LauraS45 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
thank you. you are the only one to kind of capture my meaning. :D :woohoo:
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   General Artist
:hug:
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angrboda555 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
wow... just ... I don't have words for this. it's incredible how you can get all that feeling in this
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LauraS45 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
thank you
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angrboda555 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012
you're welcome!
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